JJJ To The S Feedback

[pete]

Hey guys,

I normally never ask for feedback (I'm a cocky bastard like that), but since J. J. J. Schmidt is a brand-new character and I'm still discovering him, I would appreciate feedback! I know it's early days, but hey, threads are permanent unless they're deleted, so...

The way I'm trying to portray JJJS is as a regular guy with real problems. He has anti-social tendencies and aggression issues stemming from bullying, but he's not a gimmicky psychopath - more of a guy you would find visiting your local shrink.

So yeah - any thoughts will be welcome, even those along the lines of 'your RPs suck, Vince Russo, go back to flipping burgers at McDonald's!' (I never have and never will flip burgers at McDonald's, but you catch my drift.)

[joe]

HIya - I think that you might want to address your opponent a little more, I know you are sort of going for a less traditional style though. While I like the character and think he's pretty funny maybe explaining why he can't just get a name change might help strengthen the back story as to why he's stuck to his stigma.

Also I know you from NGIW - Whatup. 

[pete]

Is that you, Snacky Smores?

Thanks for the feedback! - You're right, I DO need to address the reason for him not to get a name change. See, this is why I should ask for feedback more often!

With that said, I don't mind losing in the early stages if that means people get to know J3S as a character rather than just as a 'guy cutting promos'.

[joe]

Fair enough. Also not jo-jo - Mr. Creep.

[pete]

Yo dude, saw your RP, it was AMAZING. Wish I could write description like that! I'm glad I'm not fighting you this week, lol.

[joe]

Hah, thanks.